Inquiry 4 rough draft

Is my voice clear throughout the video and are the sound effects beneficial or do they muffle out my voice?


Inquiry 4 thoughts

I have done a little bit of work so far on inquiry 4. I’m using Windows Movie Maker to compile a set of pictures and back ground noises, which I found on, to compliment the narration that will soon be added into the mix. I still need to decide what I’m going to say, and I’m most likely going to write a script of some sort based off a section of the first inquiry. As for right now, I have two pictures of a lake and the sounds of water on a lake and birds to accompany this. I think it seems to work well right now but once I add some narration I’ll be able to decide if I need to tone the sound effects down or not based on the clearness of my voice. I’ll probably add a few more pictures such as people on a boat, or fish underwater to add even more to the theme of the outdoors and fishing in particular. I haven’t come across any problems yet aside from getting use to the movie maker program and tinkering with the settings to see what I can do with it. Overall, everything is going smoothly thus far and my next draft will include narration.

Inquiry 4 ideas

I’m thinking of doing my inquiry 4 based on the first inquiry of the class.  Ill be doing an audio version of some section of it. I’m not sure what section and I’m not really sure how I’ll go about doing it. I think that I’ll somehow add some sound effects of being outside and on a boat, such a birds and insects. Over this, I’ll narrate the section of actually sitting in the boat and discussing what bait we’d like to use and why that is our preferred set up or our favorite and the rhetoric that comes into play.  That’s pretty much it as for right now as I haven’t spent any time on thinking about it until now.

Jones blog

From Jones’ rules I have taken away some knowledge on how to properly argue an issue and defend it through the use of evidence. The freedom rule pretty much states that you should stay away from personal jabs at the other side, instead focus on the argument and the facts, and in my case that would be to not take any cheap shots at Miami or the parking services. It seems like it could be easy to accidentally slip up and throw out a cheap shot because of all the headaches that are caused by lack of parking throughout the campus and the hefty fines that are issued because of this. I will apply the burden of proof rule through the use of my articles and compile my arguments from the evidence provided with them. Essentially I shouldn’t just make up claims and sell them as fact. The relevance rule will be used because I do not plan on straying from my argument that Miami should improve the parking situation on Campus. I also must maintain the validity rule and assure my readers that I am not making claims that do not match up or back each other up. The piece must flow smoothly and fit together nicely.

inquiry 3 part 2 zero draft

There has always seemed to be a grudge between parking services and anyone who parks on Miami’s campus. There are many factors that make this an unfriendly situations such as limited parking availability, fines with steep prices, and meters that do not adequately suit this campus in reference to time and convenience. For those who commute, there is no guarantee that they will be able to find a parking space that allows them to move freely to their destination without making it a longer trip than it should have to be. By utilizing more space for parking, and insuring that upgrades to the campus do not remove preexisting parking lots such as the ones sacrificed for Etheridge Hall and the Armstrong Center, Miami could ensure a more convenient experience while on campus. To add more fuel to the fire, desperate times call for desperate measures, such as parking “illegally”. If you’re caught by parking services, they will not hesitate to throw out fines that can be as much as $75 or more for simply parking too close to the line in a parking spot. Is Miami more interested in the amount of money they receive from these fines each year, or providing a memorable experience for the many students who occupy the campus everyday during the semester. I would like to argue that Miami is not doing everything to address the issue, and not providing enough lots for parking other than red zone lots, there seems to be more incentive involved with collecting money than providing a workable parking situation. With my sources I will argue that enough people have been bitten by the system and I will provide reasonable insight as to how Miami has tried to tackle the issue, but how not much has been done over the past few years, while an increase in students each year creates a bigger jam than the year prior.

Inquiry 3 entry 6

Jobin, Matt. “Overcoming The Community College Parking Crunch.” University Business 13.7 (2010): 24-25. Academic Search Complete. Web. 4 Apr. 2014.

This article is about how community colleges are dealing with the same problem that all colleges are facing. Primarily due to the increase in costs and tuition many students are enrolling at community colleges and the number of students far exceeds the amount of parking. It is noted the community college students are made up entirely of commuters and it would be effective to conduct parking utilization studies to measure the use of parking and at what times it is needed the most. There are comparisons to the benefits and disadvantageous to parking lots and parking structures, such as space and money. There are comparisons made between urban and suburban campuses and their differences and their needs based on location. Urban campuses are more likely to have municipal parking on streets which could help take the load off the campus itself. Promoting alternative transportation is a way to advertise bus routes and car pooling. The key is getting the information out there so the students can utilize it, otherwise they are unaware and won’t know. Also, there needs to be safety ensured all around a campus and if there are areas where people don’t feel safe parking than it is a wasted spot. Sufficient lighting and visibility is key. In conclusion the article again states that community colleges are dealing with new parking challenges as more and more students are taken in. It will take planning and effort to provide safe and efficient parking for students and staff.

This piece was taken from University Business and I found the source under Academic Search Complete from the Miami University Libraries website. The intended audience for this article would seem to be campus planners of Community Colleges who are looking for information and suggestions on how to better accommodate a growing number of students with not enough parking for them all. It seems to be a strategically written article to give administrators and planners an idea of how to best build their campus parking based on location and size. I believe it is a credible source for these people because it provides good examples and suggestions on how to go about dealing with this issue. The article cites Eric Gohr, the director of auxiliary services for Lansing Community College. He works with a community college so it is safe to say that he has the ability to make suggestions based on what he’s experienced and that he is aware that even community colleges are dealing with the issue of parking availability. This article was released in July of 2010. It about 4 years old but in my opinion it is still current enough to hold its credibility. This focuses on Community Colleges but is still associated with any University because they all have a similar situation of too many people and not enough parking. I would still associate this article with Miami because it is addressing ways that parking can be bettered. The rhetorical pieces involved with this article are most notably logos, because it is providing logical solutions and steps to take in order to better the parking situation on community college campuses. A little bit of pathos is used because of the issue and as I’ve stated before parking woes do bring out emotions. Lastly, ethos is established by citing someone who has knowledge and experience into the issue at hand. This source is persuasive to me because it provides tips and strategies and comes from a reliable source.

I believe this piece could be useful in providing some solutions, even though this is more focused on community colleges I still believe that some of these ideas could be implemented on a level that could work for Miami’s campus.

Inquiry 3 entry 5

TROOP, DON. “Nobel? Sure. Parking Space? Maybe. (Cover Story).” Chronicle Of Higher Education 58.7 (2011): A1-A10. Academic Search Complete. Web. 4 Apr. 2014.

This is an academic article from Chronicle of Higher Education. It starts off by listing a few instances of how parking has worsened for administrators, students and staff all around the Country. An example is provided by a professor who retired at the age of 62 because she just couldn’t do it anymore. Getting to the campus around 7:30AM to ensure a parking spot and not leaving until after 11PM because of other duties. A lot of colleges will sell more parking passes than they have spots, some schools up to 65% more than what they have. The major problem seems to lie on the fact that universities are always growing and accepting more and more students each year but fail to address the need for more parking spaces in response. This article shares the stories of many professors and how they must cope with the growing population of students and the lack of parking. Many have to walk such as Lea Shopkow who commutes a mile and half on foot each day, no matter the weather. Thomas R. Rochan, president of Ithaca College has a spot designated for him 3 minutes away from his office. He once gave up his spot for a week to a lucky faculty member and he was able to experience the physiological rollercoaster of not knowing if a spot will be available, unlike his usual spot with his name on it. In the end it pretty much is summed up by explaining that everyone is having a pretty rough time in college campuses across the US as far as parking is concerned.

The article was published in the Chronicle of Higher Education and I found this by searching the Miami Libraries and Academic Search Complete. The author is Don Troop. I believe the intended audience is anyone who is interested in the overall situation that American campuses face with the large influx of students and the same number of parking spots each year to accommodate them all. I believe this is a credible source for people who are looking to get more information on the scarcity of campus parking. There are plenty of stories from faculty members all over the countries campuses. This article was published on October 7, 2011. It is over 3 years old but the problem still hasn’t been solved here at Miami, and I’m sure the campuses featured in the article are still going through the same problems as well. This isn’t an out of date piece yet because these problems are still occurring and it just shows that they’re not going anywhere. This issue is connected to the national scale parking problem across university campuses, and is also connected to Miami because we are having similar issues. This article uses a lot of pathos to bring out an emotional stance for readers, and also displays the emotions of unhappy faculty and students who struggle each day to teach and learn because of the inability to always have a convenient spot to park. There is ethos because there is credible names such as CEO’s and prestigious colleges discussed. This issue seems to be a big provider of pathos because as I stated earlier, there is a lot of emotions that go into this topic. The source is persuasive to me because it comes from an academic search engine so I believe that it is credible. I can relate to an extent with some of the peoples stories featured but I also haven’t been to scorned by the parking situation here like some others have at their respected institutions.

This source is going to be useful because I now have an outside source that is on the larger scale and dealing with the same issue. I can use comparisons of situations on other university campuses and put them side to side with problems here at Miami with our parking situation.

Inquiry 3 entry 4

Thebault, Reis. “MU pumps the brakes on student parking.” The Miami Student 3 September 2013. Web. 3 April 2014.

This article was found on the Miami Student and is written by Reis Thebault.   The main focus of this article points out that while there is indeed a lot of concern with parking for many students and staff, the campus just wasn’t intended to have so many cars on it. Parking meters have been installed in the Shriver Centers west parking lot but as one professor pointed out, Miami is not a campus that is intended to be for short periods of time, which is all that these meters accommodate as they have an one hour limit. Research found that about 43% of students who live within 1 mile of King Library still choose to drive instead of an alternative method. The consensus seems to be that Miami is stepping away from accommodating the drivers and is instead looking towards other ways of transportation.

This article came from The Miami Student and I found it online. The intended audience of this article is on students and the faculty and staff of Miami University. Like most of the articles on the Miami Student, they like to focus on the news and topics regarding and surrounding Miami University. This article was published on September 3, 2013, and updated on September 4, 2013. This article is less than a year old and seems to be a credible source because of this and other things. This article is also credible to the students and staff of Miami because of the inclusion of opinions of those who have had issues with parking and others who believe that Miami is better off with less drivers. Once again this article is based on the parking situation at Miami and is bound to bring up pathos when discussing it. There is a lot of frustration that moves through people when talking about the lack of parking spots available. Ethos is maintained by providing two sides to the story, those who think more parking is needed, and the other that believes Miami’s campus is better served for walking and using alternate transportation such as the buses. This creates an unbiased feel to the story. The source is persuasive to me because it shows that there is two sides to this story and it can better my argument because I have opinions from each side to base it from.

This source is going to be useful in providing two opinions within one article. It will help in forming my argument and will provide credible evidence as to what I am arguing for. This will easily fit in as I’m addressing both sides of the issue and in my opinion, will be very effective in doing so.

Inquiry 3 entry 3

Braude, Olivia. “‘Miami Makeover’ turns into parking takeover.” The Miami Student 22 November 2014. Web. 3 April 2014.

This article is featured in the Miami Student and is written by Olivia Braude. It focuses on the lack of parking spaces now that Miami is undergoing a makeover and construction has left an eyesore on the campus itself momentarily and on the already tarnished parking situation. There is mention of 75 faculty parking spaces being sacrificed in order to construct the Armstrong Center, and also another 220 spots that were replaced by the edition of Maple Street and Etheridge Hall. The article features the voice of George MacDonald, the assistant director of Parking and Transportation and throughout points out his concerns and how construction has severely affected the parking situation on Miami’s campus. The rest of the article addresses hefty fines upon parking illegally, attempts to utilize the bus system more trying to express the fact that Miami is an effective walking campus. There is mention of hazards to the handicap as construction has caused detours and more spots designated to the handicap are needed but that some were also added for those who need to be close. The cost of parking tickets has been described as disturbing but it is not the intent of the parking services, but only that they need to protect the little amount of parking that exists with as few problems as possible. The overall feel is unhappiness from many faculty members and students alike.

This article was published in the Miami Student and thus is exposed directly to those associated with the University. The intended audience is faculty and staff, students and the University itself. By quoting unhappy students and staff, it really provides our ears with the needed messages in response to the recent construction and its inevitable effect on parking. The credibility is very high in my opinion because there are direct quotes from those who work at Miami as instructors, and from the assistant director of Parking and Transportation. Along with this, students also voice their opinions and experiences so to me the credibility all falls onto the sheer amount of voices that are exposed because of this article. This article is not necessarily very old but is not as recent as some of my sources. It was published on November 22, 2013. But, it is still less than half a year old so it is not outdated. This is also connected to the parking issues that have come up at Miami due to the construction on campus and the amount of people who need sufficient parking in terms of its location. A lot of pathos is utilized within the quotes and opinions featured in the article. A lot of emotional responses and unhappy people who can’t seem to find parking when they need it and within a reasonable distance to their destination. Ethos is used because George MacDonald voices his take and concerns as the assistant director of Parking and Transportation which shows his credibility and knowledge on the issues. This piece is persuasive to me because I can relate to many of the opinions featured because I have also been in situations where I could not find a parking space and was late to class as a result.

This article is very useful in providing the stances of both teacher and students as well as the people who oversee the parking on campus. This will be useful in providing arguments in favor of creating new parking lots and spaces and will also include the other side of the argument as parking services state they are doing what they can with what they currently have. This will fit into my essay as a tool to provide specific instances of concern and unhappiness towards parking on campus.